Revising/Editing Checklists

Revising

Introduction

Check?	Does it have….?
	-Circle your lead/AGO
	-Underline your position statement
	-Does your introduction have feeling?
	-Circle the three reasons for your position statement

Body Paragraph #1

Check?	Does it have….?
	-Underline the position statement
	-Circle your three supporting details
	-Do all your supporting details and example support the topic sentence?
	-Underline your concluding sentence (clincher)

Body Paragraph #2

Check?	Does it have….?
	-Underline the position statement
	-Circle your three supporting details
	-Do all your supporting details and example support the topic sentence?
	-Underline your concluding sentence (clincher)

 

Body Paragraph #3

Check?	Does it have….?
	-Underline the position statement
	-Circle your three supporting details
	-Do all your supporting details and example support the topic sentence?
	-Underline your concluding sentence (clincher)

 

Conclusion

Check?	Does it have….?
	-Did you re-state your position?
	-Did you re-state your reasons?
	-Did you write a sentence that calls the reader to action?

Editing

Have you checked/corrected for the following things?	Yes	Partner?
All commonly spelled words are correct. Words I was unsure of have been double-checked with a dictionary.
I do not have any run-on or unintentional fragments. My sentences are correct and complete.
I have used a thesaurus to choose better verbs and adjectives for my speech.
I have used transition words at the beginning of each body paragraph and in each paragraph, where appropriate.
I do not use commas to separate complete sentences.
I have used the correct ending punctuation marks throughout my essay.
I have organized my essay into paragraphs and indented each one.
I have a clear, well-thought out thesis statement in my introductory paragraph.
My introductory paragraph grabs my reader’s interest and makes them want to keep reading!
My conclusion makes the reader think.
I have carefully followed all capitalization rules, especially those around proper nouns.

Exemplar Essay

Does your essay compare to this one?

 

View this video:

How to Peer Edit Properly

 

 

Now, get out your rough draft, please.

Infographics!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Show! Don't Tell!

Don't Be Boring!

Remember this?


When you make the effort to show your reader, instead of just telling them, your writing can become much more interesting. Here's an example:

Tell: "In Sweden Witches visit at Easter"

Show: "The bonfires had been lit. Fireworks danced across the sky and all around the village excited children dressed as witches were collecting sweets from their neighbors. They aren't trick or treating -- no, they're leaving their neighbors beautifully decorated letters in exchange for their sweets. For this isn't Halloween, this is how they celebrate Easter in Sweden."

or this one:

Tell: The ground floor, rented room was tiny, damp and obviously uncared for.

Show: "As he entered the room from the hallway the first thing he noticed was the musty smell: a combination of mould, damp and stale smoke. There were snail trails across the worn, brown, cord carpet that covered what little floor space there was. Opposite the doorway, pushed up against the wall, was a single bed, covered with a blanket and a flat, stained pillow.     Squeezed into the corner of the room at the foot of the bed was a chest of drawers. On top of the drawers was a single electric hotplate. Opposite this was a sink piled high with dirty pots with a toothbrush just visible, peeking out through the handle of a mug. Facing the bed was a small table with a fold up-chair. On top of the table was an overflowing garbage can and yesterday's newspaper."




Now, write a comment on this blog post where you try to improve this "tell":

We spent the day at the beach.

Pre-Writing Time!

First Step: Check your buckets

         Bucket 1 - Reason 1               Bucket 2 - Reason 2         Bucket 3 - Reason 3

Step 2: Thesis Statement

Step 3 - Outlining

As you complete the outline that has been passed out, use your notes and earlier blog entries to help you fill out the evidence you will need to make your writing compelling.

 

Transition Words and Phrases

Need a Dictionary?

Need a Dictionary?

Enter the word you need under where it says "Word or phrase"

Then click "Search"

Extension Activity #3

Imports/Exports

Complete the following activity about imports and exports:

No, There Are No Cookies

Record your answers for Activity 1 and Activity 2 in your notes.

Answer the questions in the Conclusion section in your notes, as well.

Finally, write your answers to the Assessment Activity on a note card and then turn it in to Mr. Buck for Honey Badger stickers.

Document Analysis - Part 3

Bucketing!

We will break down these questions together, please make sure to record the answers in your notes.

 Bucketing is a way of organizing the information you gather as we read. It is very similar to how we have been taking notes recently, except we are looking for more than one answer at a time.

 

Today, you are going to read a variety of documents, answering questions as you go. Also, think about which "buckets" the information will go in as we write.

 

 

 



 

 

 

 

 

Real Quick - What are imports and exports?

Watch this:

 

Imports/Exports

 

 

 

Back to it....

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 



Extension Activity #2

Extension Activity #2

After completing Part 2, please take this web quest.

China Webquest

For Website #1, you do not have to answer any questions, but you should take notes that will help you answer the DBQ.
Also, at the bottom of the page are additional links you can explore:

For Website #2, click on the picture to see all the artifacts buried with Shihuangdi. Cool stuff!

For Website #3, please make sure you follow these directions while you take the tour. Steering the tour can be a little tricky!

~ Click on the moving picture to activate it.
~ You can control which direction to move the picture by clicking the picture and going to the right or left.
~ Click on the outlined red boxes to take a tour of the tower and more!

How The Wall Was Built - Part 2

How The Wall Was Built

To start, please watch the following video. Remember, only take notes on this question: Did the benefits of building the wall outweigh the costs?

Building the Wall Video

 

 

 

 

On a piece of notebook paper, please answer the following questions. Please make sure that you answer in complete sentences.

 

 

 

 

Extension Activity #1

What is a cost/benefit analysis?

When we do this DBQ, you are going to be asked to do a cost/benefit analysis for building the Great Wall of China.

To help you better understand this process, please complete the activity at the following link. Read all the directions carefully and complete the Assessment Activity at the bottom to prove your mastery!

Three Little Pigs - Cost/Benefit

Document List/Hook Exercise (Part 1)

 

Before starting the Hook Assignment, please watch this video link for a little background information:

Your Amazing Interstate Highway System! 

Record you brainstorm on a cost/benefit T-chart that looks like this:

 

Write a paragraph on notebook paper that explains your position. Include at least three supporting reasons for the decision you would make.

Great Wall DBQ - Part 1

Today we are going to take our Evidence Based Questioning to a whole new level! We are going to start getting you ready for the rigorous process of Document Based Questioning.

Document Based Questioning is the process you will use when you take Advanced Placement classes in high school. For more information on DBQ's, please visit:  DBQ Project (optional)

Our first DBQ will center on the The Great Wall of China, the massive structure that protects China's Northern Border.

For a little refresher on this man-made wonder, please watch the following video:
History of the Great Wall

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